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The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. v.1

The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. v. 1
The given data shows the internet usages activity of seven age groups. As is presented in the data, teenagers mostly play games and get news while the mid-aged people mostly search and purchase products. According to the presentation, teenagers mostly play online games, look for news, download, and purchase products when they are online. They rarely search for people. With the increase of age internet users do product search mostly and their second most activity online involves getting news and buying products. Among the 40 to 60 years old internet users, the most common activity is product purchasing. With the increase of age, the download activity decreases and searching for people activity increases. For instance, only 5% activity of teenagers involves searching for people while this rate increases to around 30% when they get older. On the other hand, 52% of teenagers’ internet activities involve downloading from the internet while this rate decreases to less than 30% over time. Similarly, the online game playing is most popular among teenagers and this percentage decreases significantly among the grownup people. In summary, teenagers mostly download and play games online while matured people mostly search and purchase products online. Getting news and buying products are done by all age group and aged people mostly search for other people online.
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shows
the internet usages
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activity
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age
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teenagers
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mostly
play
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games
and
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get
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news
while the mid-aged
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people
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mostly
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search
and
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purchase
products.

According to the presentation,
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teenagers
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mostly
play
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online
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games
, look for
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news
, download, and
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purchase
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products
when they are
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online
. They rarely
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search
for
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people
. With the
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increase
of
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age
internet users do
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product
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search
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mostly
and their second most
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activity
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online
involves getting
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news
and buying
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products
. Among the 40 to 60 years
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internet users, the most common
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activity
is
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product
purchasing. With the
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increase
of
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age
, the download
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activity
decreases and searching for
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people
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activity
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.
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,
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only
5%
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activity
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teenagers
involves searching for
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people
while this rate
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increases
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get
older.
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, 52% of
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teenagers’
internet
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activities
involve downloading from the internet while this rate decreases to less than 30% over time.
Similarly
, the
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online
game playing is most popular among
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teenagers
and this percentage decreases
significantly
among the grownup
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people
.

In summary,
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teenagers
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mostly
download and play
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games
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online
while matured
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people
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mostly
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search
and
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purchase
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products
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online
. Getting
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news
and buying
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products
are done
by all
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age
group and aged
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people
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mostly
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search
for other
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people
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online
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
216 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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