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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. v.2

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. v. 2
The pie charts exhibit four types of food consumptions of the world with that of China and India in 2008. Overall, processed food items were consumed at the highest percentage than other food items and Chinese citizens were the highest consumer of nuts and seeds while Indians primarily relied on processed food and animal food. According to the pie charts, people of the world, as well as the China and India, ate processed food more than any other food item. People ate almost 41% processed food in the world in 2008. This percentage was higher in India than China. On an average, 29% vegetable and fruits were absorbed by the world population while this percentage was 32% in China and 23% in India. Foods from animals were the third largest consumed item and Indian ate more than the world average. Nuts and seeds consumed in India and China were much higher than the world average. It is worth noticing that Indian ate more animal foods than Chinese did while Chinese devoured more vegetables, fruits and seeds than Indians. On an average, Indian population consumed more animal foods and seeds items than the world population while Chinese people ate more vegetable and seeds than the rest of the world.
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consumptions
of the
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with that of China and India in 2008.
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,
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processed
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food
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items
were
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consumed
at the highest percentage than other
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food
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and Chinese citizens were the highest consumer of nuts and
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seeds
while Indians
primarily
relied on
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processed
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food
and
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animal
food.

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more than any other
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.
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almost 41%
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in the
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world
in 2008. This percentage was higher in India than China. On an average, 29% vegetable and fruits
were absorbed
by the
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population while this percentage was 32% in China and 23% in India.
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were the third largest
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and Indian
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more than the
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average. Nuts and
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seeds
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consumed
in India and China were much higher than the
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average.

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more
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animal
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foods
than Chinese did while Chinese devoured more vegetables, fruits and
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seeds
than Indians. On an average, Indian population
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more
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animal
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seeds
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than the
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world
population while Chinese
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more vegetable and
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world
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. v. 2

Academic
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3 paragraphs
208 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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