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The table below gives information on interest use in six categories by age group. Describe the information in the table and make comparsions where appropriate. v.2

The table below gives information on interest use in six categories by age group. Describe the information in the table and make comparsions where appropriate. v. 2
The liner chart reveals that information of representation on the network use in six types in the chart. There are all age group involve comparsion where appropriate. Moving a quick glance on the illustration there have six categories toddlers and dwellers use the activity in their life. Hence, age group interest get news teenager and old age 70 to 76. Therefore, online games are like to toddlers. It is high ratio in the chart. Afterthat, adolescent are interest to download film in the cell phone in 52 percent. But, dwellers have fall down ratio download film because they do not interest download film. To trigger with, teenager do not like search the product onliine. Moreover, they have reduce the ratio in 0 proprotion. Otherwise, 40 age group interest to reasearch product in 83 percent. Finally, buying a product are same ratio to teenager and old age. To sum up, toddlers are very active play games for online website. Dwellers are interest to product research and buying a product they have increase ratio in the chart.
The liner
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reveals that information of representation on the network
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use
in six types in the
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. There are all
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age
group involve
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comparsion
where appropriate.

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use
the activity in their life.
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age
group
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interest
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get
news
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teenager
and
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old
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age
70 to 76.
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in the
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.
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, adolescent are
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to download film in the cell phone in 52 percent.
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download film
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interest
download film.

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do not like search the
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onliine
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in 0
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reasearch
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in 83 percent.
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, buying a
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are same
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age.

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very
active play games for online website. Dwellers are
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interest
to
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research and buying a
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product
they have increase
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in the
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.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on interest use in six categories by age group. Describe the information in the table and make comparsions where appropriate. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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