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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v.6

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 6
The provided table illustrates the consumer expense's proportion of three different categories in five European countries in 2002. In general, food, drinks and tobacco had the highest proportion of total expenditures, followed by garment items. And the consumers were less likely toward the educational and entertaining expenses. In food and drink expense, Turkey and Ireland were well above than other countries, representing 32 per cent and 29 per cent respectively, whereas Italy, Spain and Sweden saw below 20 per cent. By contrast, the gap among the countries spending on clothes and footwear was narrowed. The people in most of the countries would estimate 5 to 6 percent budget on this category. Except for Italy, where has been famous in fashion for centuries, the people would like to spend as high as 9 percent on their fashion. In leisure and education expense, Turkey remained the highest proportion with 4 percent while other countries were merely between 2 to 3 percent. Spain even saw the lowest proportion to hit below 2 per cent. To sum up, the European consumers had similar spending habits when food and drinks remained the top, garment items were the second, and education and entertainments came to the last. In more details, Turkish consumers were more willing to pay for food and entertainment than others when Italian consumers would spend the most in fashion.
The provided table illustrates the
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consumer
expense's
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proportion
of three
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different
categories in five European
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countries
in 2002.
In general
,
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food
, drinks and tobacco had the highest
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proportion
of total expenditures, followed by garment items. And the
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consumers
were less likely toward the educational and entertaining expenses.

In
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food
and drink expense, Turkey and Ireland were well
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above
than other
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countries
, representing 32 per cent and 29 per cent
respectively
, whereas Italy, Spain and Sweden
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saw
below 20 per cent. By contrast, the gap among the
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countries
spending on clothes and footwear
was narrowed
. The
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people
in most of the
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countries
would estimate 5 to 6
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percent
budget on this category.
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Except for
Italy, where has been
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famous
in fashion for centuries, the
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people
would like to spend as high as 9
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percent
on their fashion. In leisure and education expense, Turkey remained the highest
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proportion
with 4
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percent
while other
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countries
were
merely
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between 2 to 3
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percent
. Spain even
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saw
the lowest
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proportion
to hit below 2 per cent.

To sum up, the European
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consumers
had similar spending habits when
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food
and drinks remained the top, garment items were the second, and education and entertainments came to the last. In more
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details
, Turkish
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consumers
were more willing to pay for
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food
and entertainment than others when Italian
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consumers
would spend the most in fashion.
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 6

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3 paragraphs
226 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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