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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v.2

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 2
The first chart illustrates the change in the number of marriages and divorces in the US over a 30-year period from 1970. The second chart compares the proportion of American adults’ different marital statuses in two years, 1970 and 2000. Overall, there was a clear downward trend of people getting married in the US. Although a majority of adult Americans were married in both recorded years, there was a quite higher percentage of people staying single in 2000. From 1970 to 1980, 2. 5 million marriages were registered in America; however, this number gradually decreased to 2 million by the year 2000. In contrast, the number of divorces filed was around 1 million in 1970 and then reached a peak at almost 1. 5 million a decade later. There had been since then fewer divorces and the figure fell back to 1 million in 2000, exactly 50% of that of the marriages in the same year. The percentage of married American adults dropped from 70% in 1970 to around 60% in 2000. Similarly, there was a marginal decrease in the proportion of widowed people. The figures for never-married people and divorced ones experienced a slight rise, by around 8% for each category.
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period from 1970. The second chart compares the proportion of American adults’
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marital statuses in two years, 1970 and 2000.

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, there was a
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downward trend of
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people
getting married in the US. Although a majority of adult Americans
were married
in both recorded years, there was a quite higher percentage of
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people
staying single in 2000.

From 1970 to 1980, 2. 5
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million
marriages
were registered
in America;
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, this number
gradually
decreased to 2
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million
by the
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year
2000.
In contrast
, the number of divorces filed was around 1
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million
in 1970 and then reached a peak at almost 1. 5
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million
a decade later. There had been since then fewer divorces and the figure fell back to 1
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million
in 2000, exactly 50% of that of the marriages in the same year.

The percentage of married American adults dropped from 70% in 1970 to around 60% in 2000.
Similarly
, there was a marginal decrease in the proportion of widowed
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people
. The figures for never-married
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people
and divorced ones experienced a slight rise, by around 8% for each category.
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IELTS academic The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 2

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