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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v.3

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 3
The given bar graphs show information about marriage and divorce rate of USA from 1970 to 2000 and also illustrate marital status in two years 1970 and 2000. According to the first bar graph, as it can be seen clearly, initially marriage rate of USA was 2. 5 million in the year 1970 which remained constant after one decade and started receding slightly afterwards. The total marriage rate in the USA remained exactly 2 million in the year 2000 respectively. On contrary, as is observed from the bar chart, in 1970 divorce rate was one million which magnified to 1. 4 million after a decade but again dropping trend can be seen. And finally, divorce rate slumped to one million which was its initial state. On the other hand, as is presented in another bar graph, in 1970 total adult people were married by 70% while 15 % never got married. Widowed and divorced status remained just under 10% in 1970 which dropped to 3% approximately in the year 2000. Divorce status increased but remained under 10% but very close to 10%.
The
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bar graphs
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show
information about marriage and
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divorce
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rate
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of USA
from 1970 to 2000 and
also
illustrate marital status in two years 1970 and 2000.

According to the
first
bar graph, as it can be
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seen
clearly
,
initially
marriage
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rate
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of USA
was 2. 5
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million
in the
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year
1970 which
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remained
constant after one decade and
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started
receding
slightly
afterwards. The total marriage
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rate
in the USA
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remained
exactly 2
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million
in the
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year
2000
respectively
.

On contrary, as
is observed
from the bar chart, in 1970
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divorce
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rate
was one
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million
which magnified to 1. 4
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million
after a decade
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but
again dropping trend can be
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seen
. And
finally
,
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divorce
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rate
slumped to one
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million
which was its initial state.

On the other hand
, as
is presented
in another bar graph, in 1970 total adult
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people
were married
by 70% while 15 % never
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got
married. Widowed and divorced status
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remained
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just
under 10% in 1970 which dropped to 3% approximately in the
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year
2000.
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Divorce
status increased
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but
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remained
under 10%
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but
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very
close to 10%.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 3

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6.0
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