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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v.5

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 5
The table illustrates the proportion of expenditure of citizens from five various nations in the year 2002. In general, it can be seen that every consumer in all the five countries tended to spend more money on food, drinks and tobacco than clothing and footwear, which was then followed by leisure and education. First of all, Turkey was the country where citizens spent most of their money on food, drinks and tobacco (32. 14%) than any other countries which were lower than 30%. A similar trend can be observed for the spending on leisure and education, that is consumers in Turkey allocated the majority of their money in this sector (4. 35%) compared to other nations (less than 3. 50%) with the minority of consumers from Spain (1. 98%). Turning to the expenditure on clothing and footwear, Italy turned out to be the country which had its citizens to spend most of their incomes to buy clothes and footwear (9. 00%), which was then followed by Turkey (6. 63%) and the country with the least spending on these stuff was Sweden (5. 40%). Besides, Sweden was also the country which spent the least money on food, drinks and tobacco among the five countries (2. 21%).
The table illustrates the proportion of expenditure of citizens from five various nations in the year 2002.
In general
, it can be
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seen
that every consumer in all the five
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countries
tended to spend more
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money
on food, drinks and tobacco than clothing and footwear, which was then followed by leisure and education.

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First of all
, Turkey was the
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country
where citizens spent most of their
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money
on food, drinks and tobacco (32. 14%) than any other
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countries
which were lower than 30%. A similar trend can
be observed
for the spending on leisure and education,
that is
consumers in Turkey allocated the majority of their
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money
in this sector (4. 35%) compared to other nations (less than 3. 50%) with the minority of consumers from Spain (1. 98%).

Turning to the expenditure on clothing and footwear, Italy turned out to be the
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country
which had its citizens to spend most of their incomes to
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buy
clothes and footwear (9. 00%), which was then followed by Turkey (6. 63%) and the
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country
with the least spending on these stuff was Sweden (5. 40%).
Besides
, Sweden was
also
the
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country
which spent the least
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money
on food, drinks and tobacco among the five
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countries
(2. 21%).
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 5

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3 paragraphs
205 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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