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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v.4

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 4
The provided table shows the cost percentage of the items that the consumers in five different countries, including Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey, spent on in 2002. In the table, we can see that food, drinks and tobacco held the highest percentage of consumer expenditure and the numbers are all higher than 15% whereas the percentage in the leisure/education category are all below 5% in the above countries. In Ireland and Turkey, the percentages in food/drinks/tobacco are both around 30% and are nearly five times higher than the category of clothing and footwear. In comparison, consumers in Spain and Sweden spent only three times more of their expense in food rather than in clothing. Italy, however, is the only country that the percentages between food/drinks/tobacco and clothing/footwear are only one and a half times higher. In observation of this table, we can also grab the information about how much people spent on leisure time activities and education. There was a surprisingly common trend in Ireland, Italy and Spain. Their expense in clothing/footwear tripled over the one in leisure/education. On the contrary of this coherent pattern, the multiples between these two categories are less than two times in Sweden and Turkey.
The provided table
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the cost
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of the items that the consumers in five
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countries, including Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey, spent on in 2002.

In the table, we can
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see
that food, drinks and tobacco held the highest
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percentage
of consumer expenditure and the numbers are all higher than 15% whereas the
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percentage
in the leisure/education category are all below 5% in the above countries.

In Ireland and Turkey, the
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percentages
in food/drinks/tobacco are both around 30% and are
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five
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times
higher than the category of clothing and footwear.
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comparison, consumers in Spain and Sweden spent
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three
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more of their expense in food
rather
than in clothing. Italy,
however
, is the
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only
country that the
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percentages
between food/drinks/tobacco and clothing/footwear are
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only
one and a half
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times
higher.

In observation of this table, we can
also
grab the information about how much
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people
spent on leisure
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time
activities and education. There was a
surprisingly
common trend in Ireland, Italy and Spain. Their expense in clothing/footwear tripled over the one in leisure/education.
On the contrary
of this coherent pattern, the multiples between these two categories are less than two
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times
in Sweden and Turkey.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 4

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
201 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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