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The table below gives information on consumer on different items in five different countries in 2002. v.2

The table below gives information on consumer on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 2
The table informs the percentage of budget spent on three types of item in five Europe countries in 2002. It can be seen that Ireland and Turkey are the two most countries which have the money spent on food/drink/tobacco the highest with 28, 91% and 32, 14%. Next are Italy, Spain, Sweden with 16, 36%, 18, 80% and 15, 77%, respectively. The proportion of money spend on clothing and footwear accounts for 9, 00% income of Italian and 6, 63% in Turkey. The figures are much lower in expenditure spent on the same category in Spain (6, 51%), Ireland (6, 43%) and Sweden (5, 40%). The percentage of annual income of these five countries spend on the last category is the lowest. Spending 4, 35% total income on leisure/education in Turkey, the Italian spent 3, 20% and the Swedish spent 3, 22%, which it' s virtually identical. The range of expenditure on the same type of items varies from 2, 21% in Ireland and 1, 98 % in Spain.
The table informs the percentage of budget
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on three types of item in five Europe countries in 2002.

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that Ireland and Turkey are the two most countries which have the money
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on food/drink/tobacco the highest with 28, 91% and 32, 14%.
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are Italy, Spain, Sweden with 16, 36%, 18, 80% and 15, 77%,
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The proportion of money
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on clothing and footwear accounts for 9, 00% income of Italian and 6, 63% in Turkey. The figures are much lower in expenditure
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on the same category in Spain (6, 51%), Ireland (6, 43%) and Sweden (5, 40%).

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The
percentage of annual income of these five countries spend on the last category is the lowest. Spending 4, 35% total income on leisure/education in Turkey, the Italian
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3, 20% and the Swedish
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3, 22%, which
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identical. The range of expenditure on the same type of items varies from 2, 21% in Ireland and 1, 98 % in Spain.
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on consumer on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 2

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169 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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