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The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.
Contained in the pie chart provided is data pertaining to the proportion of poor females, while the bar chart demonstrates the rates of poverty by gender and age in America in 2008. Overall, females who were single with no dependent children made up the largest proportion of total, and the poverty rate of females were higher than that of males. In regard to the pie chart, one sees a noteworthy gain in single females without dependent children. It is evident that the percentage of poor single females without children accounted considerably 54% of total, but the figure of single females who had children were only 8%. For married females, those who had children made up 12% which was 14% lower than the proportion of those with dependent children. Turning to the bar chart, the trend in evidence was one of downward. Apparently, the poverty rate of males under 5 years old was just over 20% and then decreased gradually to approximately to 7% when they reached 59 years old. After that, the males' poverty rate had a slight increase to about 9% at the age range of 60-64 before dropping inappreciably to around 6% at the age range of 75 and over. There was a similar trend for females as their poverty rates fell, starting from about 21% at the age of under 5 to nearly 15% when they were 75 and older. It is also worth noting that the lowest poverty rate of females was at the age range from 45 to 54, about 8% only.
Contained in the pie
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chart
provided is data pertaining to the proportion of poor
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females
, while the bar
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chart
demonstrates the
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rates
of
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poverty
by gender and
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age
in America in 2008.
Overall
,
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females
who were
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single
with no dependent
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children
made up the largest proportion of total, and the
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poverty
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rate
of
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females
were higher than that of males.

In regard to the pie
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chart
, one
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sees
a noteworthy gain in
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single
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females
without dependent
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children
. It is evident that the percentage of poor
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single
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females
without
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children
accounted
considerably
54% of total,
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but
the figure of
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single
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females
who had
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children
were
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only
8%. For married
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females
, those who had
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children
made up 12% which was 14% lower than the proportion of those with dependent children.

Turning to the bar
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chart
, the trend in evidence was one of downward.
Apparently
, the
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poverty
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rate
of males under 5 years
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old
was
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just
over 20% and then decreased
gradually
to approximately to 7% when they reached 59 years
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old
. After that, the
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poverty
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rate
had a slight increase to about 9% at the
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age
range of 60-64
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before
dropping
inappreciably
to around 6% at the
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age
range of 75 and over. There was a similar trend for
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females
as their
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poverty
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rates
fell, starting from about 21% at the
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age
of under 5 to
nearly
15% when they were 75 and older. It is
also
worth noting that the lowest
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poverty
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rate
of
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females
was at the
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age
range from 45 to 54, about 8%
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only
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.

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6.5
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