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The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. v.2

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000.
The bar chart compares six different regions, namely developed countries, Latin America/ Caribbean, East Asia/ Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia in term of rates of illiteracy in 2000, dividing into males and females As can be seen from the chart, the percentage of illiteracy in women was much higher than men, while the majority of illiteracy rates have more popular in south Asia over the period shown. There was rarely unlettered in developed countries in both genders from approximately 1% to 2%. The trend was true stability at 10% in Latin America/ Caribbean countries. In contrast, the figure of analphabetic in female was higher, compared to male increased significantly to approximately 20% at the other four countries: East Asia/ Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia. The percentage of illiteracy in South Asia went up to reach at over 30%, roughly 50% which broken down male and female respectively.
The bar chart compares six
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developed countries
, Latin America/ Caribbean, East Asia/ Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia in term of rates of
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illiteracy
in 2000, dividing into males and females

As can be
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seen
from the chart, the percentage of
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illiteracy
in women was much higher than
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men
, while the majority of
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illiteracy
rates have more popular in
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south Asia
over the period shown.

There was rarely unlettered in
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developed countries
in both genders from approximately 1% to 2%. The trend was true stability at 10% in Latin America/ Caribbean countries.

In contrast
, the figure of
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in female was higher, compared to male increased
significantly
to approximately 20% at the other four countries: East Asia/ Oceania, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia. The percentage of
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illiteracy
in South Asia went up to reach at over 30%, roughly 50% which broken down male and female
respectively
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IELTS academic The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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