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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015
The bar chart gives information about the percentages of divorces in Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015. According to the chart, since 2011 in Sweden there was the major number of divorces, except in 2015, when Finland overtaked Sweden reaching a peak of more than 40 percent. Over this 5-year period, in Sweden the divorce' s rate increased until 2012, when peaked at almost 50 percent. Then it gradually declined to less than 40 percent in 2015. On the other hand, in Finland the divorce' s rate was at about 37 percent in 2011. After that it went down to 32 percent in 2012 and then it steadily rised reaching a peak of 41 percent in 2015. Overall, Sweden was the country with the highest percentage of divorces since 2011, but Finland exceed it in 2015.
The bar chart gives information about the percentages of
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divorces
in Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015.

According to the chart, since 2011 in Sweden there was the major number of
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divorces
, except in 2015, when Finland
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Sweden reaching a peak of more than 40
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percent
. Over this 5-year period, in Sweden the
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#039; s rate increased until 2012, when peaked at almost 50
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percent
. Then it
gradually
declined to less than 40
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percent
in 2015.

On the other hand
, in Finland the
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#039; s rate was at about 37
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percent
in 2011. After that it went down to 32
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percent
in 2012 and then it
steadily
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rised
reaching a peak of 41
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percent
in 2015.

Overall
, Sweden was the country with the highest percentage of
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divorces
since 2011,
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Finland exceed it in 2015.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015

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