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The table below given information about students enrolments at Manchester university in 1937 and 1967, 2017. summarize the information selecting main features and relevant and comparisons. v.2

The table below given information about students enrolments at Manchester university in 1937 and 1967, 2017.
The given chart compares the proportion of boys and girls enrolments at Manchester university during the time period 1937, 1967and 2017. Overall, the total percentage of candidates in 2017 year was higher than other period of time. In all the years the students enrolling proportion of most by males and females as well as locals. In the year 2017, the total proportion of students is highest, at 6254 compared with 327 and 1133 for new children in the year 1937 and 1967 respectively. The percentage of females account for 55 of the total students in the. Year 2017 while the percentage were lower for 1937 and 3 decades, at 45% and, at only 35% respectively. However, in terms of local students that largest percentage in 1937, accounting for 55%. The figures for year 2017 and 1967are only 15% and 2% respectively. Moreover, students were enrolling at university from abroad which has largest percentage at 32% in 2017 as compared to 6% in year 1937 and 7% of 1967 respectively.
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chart compares the proportion of boys and girls
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enrolments
at Manchester university during the time period 1937, 1967and 2017.

Overall
, the total
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percentage
of candidates in 2017
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year
was higher than other period of time. In all the years the
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students
enrolling proportion of most by males and females
as well
as locals.

In the
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year
2017, the total proportion of
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students
is highest, at 6254 compared with 327 and 1133 for new children in the
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year
1937 and 1967
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respectively
. The
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percentage
of females
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account
for 55 of the total
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students
in
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the.
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Year
2017 while the
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percentage
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were
lower for 1937 and 3 decades, at 45% and, at
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only
35%
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respectively
.
However
, in terms of local
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students
that largest
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percentage
in 1937, accounting for 55%. The figures for
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year
2017 and 1967are
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only
15% and 2%
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respectively
.
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,
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students
were enrolling at university from abroad which has
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largest
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percentage
at 32% in 2017 as compared to 6% in
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year
1937 and 7% of 1967
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respectively
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below given information about students enrolments at Manchester university in 1937 and 1967, 2017.

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3 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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