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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v.5

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 5
The table illustrates how the mode of travel changed in England between 1985 and 2000. Generally, comparing to 1985, English travelled more in 2000, 6475 miles for each citizen. Cars were by far the most popular modes of transports in both years in England. In 1985, the average distance travelled by English in a car was 3, 199 miles, and 4806 miles in 2000. On the other hand, we can see that taxi was the least popular vehicle. Although the travelling distance in 2000 using taxi was above three times than that of 1985, only 42 miles were travelled per person this year, which was almost the same for the bicycle rides. No significant changes happened to some modes of travels, like walking and bicycle between 1985 and 2000. According to the table, in 2000 local bus was used less than that of 1985. Only 274 miles were travelled in 2000 by buses, which was 55 miles fewer than that of 1985. In contrast, the long-distance bus became more popular over the time. Each person travelled 124 miles by long-distance buses in 2000 while only 54 miles in 1985. In summary, English people travelled more distance in 2000 than in 1985. It is obvious that cars were the most popular mode of travelling.
The table illustrates how the
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of travel
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in England between 1985 and 2000.
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, comparing to 1985, English
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travelled
more in 2000,
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6475 miles
for each citizen.

Cars were by far the most
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popular
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modes
of transports in both years in England. In 1985, the average distance
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travelled
by English in a car was 3,
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199 miles
, and
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4806 miles
in 2000.
On the other hand
, we can
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that taxi was the least
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popular
vehicle. Although the travelling distance in 2000 using taxi was above three
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times
than that of 1985,
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only
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42 miles
were
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travelled
per person this year, which was almost the same for the bicycle rides. No significant
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changes
happened to
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some
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modes
of travels, like walking and bicycle between 1985 and 2000. According to the table, in 2000 local bus was
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used
less than that of 1985.
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Only
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274 miles
were
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travelled
in 2000 by buses, which was
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55 miles
fewer than that of 1985.
In contrast
, the long-distance bus became more
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popular
over the time. Each person
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travelled
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124 miles
by long-distance buses in 2000 while
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only
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54 miles
in 1985.

In summary, English
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people
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travelled
more distance in 2000 than in 1985. It is obvious that cars were the most
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popular
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mode
of travelling.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 5

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3 paragraphs
213 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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