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The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012. v.1

The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012. v. 1
The table summarises the number of passengers who travelled through three German airports during 2007 and 2012. As a general trend, the Frankfurt was the busiest air-terminal with the highest number of passengers while the visitor number is the Berlin Tegel airport increased remarkably. As can be seen, the Frankfurt airport served more than 36 million passengers in 2007 when travellers in the Dusseldorf airport was just above 27 million, almost 10 million higher than that of Berlin Tegel. Passengers in these airports in the next two years significantly grew and the Dusseldorf airport served the highest number of commuters in 2009, approximately 48 million. Passengers in the Berlin Tegel more than doubled in just two years. Meanwhile, visitors in the Dusseldorf airport declined but served more than 45 million people in 2012, highest during the whole period. On the contrary, Frankfurt airport received an increasing number of passengers each year before hitting the peak in 2012 with almost 70 million passengers. Interestingly, Berlin Tegel airport was preferred by the same number of air travellers in 2010, 2011 and 2012, which was 43. 3 million, the highest growth compared to the initial passenger number in these airports.
The table
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summarises
the
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of
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passengers
who travelled through three German
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airports
during 2007 and 2012. As a general trend, the Frankfurt was the busiest air-terminal with the highest
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number
of
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passengers
while the visitor
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number
is the Berlin
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Tegel
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airport
increased
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, the Frankfurt
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served more than 36
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million
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passengers
in 2007 when
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travellers
in the
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Dusseldorf
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was
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above 27
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million
, almost 10
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higher than that of Berlin
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.
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in these
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airports
in the
next
two years
significantly
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Dusseldorf
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served the highest
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of commuters in 2009, approximately 48
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.
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in the Berlin
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more than doubled in
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Dusseldorf
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declined
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served more than 45
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in 2012, highest during the whole period.
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received an increasing
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of
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each year
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before
hitting the peak in 2012 with almost 70
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.
Interestingly
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Tegel
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was preferred
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of air
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travellers
in 2010, 2011 and 2012, which was 43. 3
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, the highest growth compared to the initial
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in these
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2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012. v. 1

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