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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v.2

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 2
The line graph delineates how the vehicle preferences of British changed over the time by comparing the average distance an English travelled using different modes of carriers in 1985 and 2000. Overall, cars were British citizen’s primary mode of transportation and taxi was the least used mode of travel for them. As the data suggests, an English travelled more than 6400 miles on an average in a year which was almost 36% higher than the distance an average Brit travelled in 1985. Car use predominated this total travel as more than 4800 miles out of 6400 in 2000 were crossed using automobiles and a similar trend was seen in 1985. Use of personal cars in truth increased over the time, as the data outlines. Reliance on buses was higher than train and bicycle use and despite an average 255 miles walking by a Brit in 1985, it decreased after 15 years. Taxi was perhaps the least preferred mode of commuting as only 13 miles were travelled by a British using it in 1985 which, despite an increase in 2000, was ignorable. Train travel hiked in 2000 while distance travelled by British in local buses dropped. All other transportations contributed to 585 miles of travel by a Brit in 2000, an increase than that of 1985.
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distance an English
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using
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modes
of carriers in 1985 and 2000.
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mode
of transportation and taxi was the least
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used
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mode
of
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travel
for them.

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travelled
more than
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6400 miles
on an
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average
in a year which was almost 36% higher than the distance an
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average
Brit
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travelled
in 1985. Car
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use
predominated this total
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travel
as more than
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4800 miles
out of 6400 in 2000
were crossed
using automobiles and a similar trend was
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seen
in 1985.
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Use
of personal cars in truth increased over the time, as the data outlines. Reliance on buses was higher than train and bicycle
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use
and despite an
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average
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255 miles
walking by a Brit in 1985, it decreased after 15 years.

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mode
of commuting as
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13 miles
were
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travelled
by a British using it in 1985 which, despite an increase in 2000, was ignorable. Train
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travel
hiked in 2000 while distance
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travelled
by British in local buses dropped. All other transportations contributed to
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585 miles
of
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travel
by a Brit in 2000, an increase than that of 1985.
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 2

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215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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