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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v.4

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 4
The table data shows information on the transportations used by British between 1985 and 2000. As is presented in the table, using the car was the most common way of travelling by English both in 1985 and 2000. In 1985, more than 3000 miles out of total 4740 were travelled by an average British using cars that increased to well over 4500 out of total 6475 in the year 2000. The second most common way of travelling for these two years was the local bus which was far less than that of cars. Taxi was the least preferred transport both years amounting only 13 miles and 42 miles per person in these two years. The bicycle was used for an average of 50 miles travel by each person in 1985 and that decreased to 41 miles in 2000 which show the decline of bicycle usages by British. Train, local distance buses were two other modes of transports by British, and their popularity increased over the time. In 1985, 255 miles were travelled by a British citizen on foot while this distance decreased slightly in 2000. All other transportations used comprised about 450 miles per person in 1985 which increased to 585 in 2000. In summary, the popularity of car as a transportation increased among British people in 15 years of time and they mostly preferred to use cars as their means of travel.
The table data
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used
by British between 1985 and 2000. As
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in the table, using the
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car
was the most common way of travelling by English both in 1985 and 2000.

In 1985, more than
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3000 miles
out of total 4740
were travelled
by an average British using
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cars
that
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increased
to well over 4500 out of total 6475 in the
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year
2000. The second most common way of travelling for these two years was the local bus which was far less than that of
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cars
. Taxi was the least preferred transport both years amounting
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only
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13 miles
and
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42 miles
per person in these two years.

The bicycle was
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used
for an average of
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50 miles
travel by each person in 1985 and that decreased to
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41 miles
in 2000 which
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show
the decline of bicycle usages by British. Train, local distance buses were two other modes of transports by British, and their popularity
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increased
over the time. In 1985,
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255 miles
were travelled
by a British citizen on foot while this distance decreased
slightly
in 2000. All other transportations
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used
comprised about
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450 miles
per person in 1985 which
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increased
to 585 in 2000.

In summary, the popularity of
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car
as a transportation
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increased
among British
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people
in 15 years of
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time and
they
mostly
preferred to
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use
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cars
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 4

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