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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v.3

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 3
The table data outlines transportation preference by British commuters between 1985 and 2000. As is obvious, cars were the most common means of travelling in the two mentioned years in the UK. Interestingly, British did not use taxi quite often back in 1985 - only 13 miles per year was cut by every citizen which made the taxi the least common mode of transportation this year. However, this number increased to 42 miles per person in 2000. On the other hand, bicycles were one of the least used vehicles in 2000 covering only 41 passenger miles. It is clear that cars were still on top of preference among commuters, increasing from 3199 miles in 1985 to 4806 miles in 2000. Walking habits remained almost the same by British while the use of local bus declined. Each passenger travelled around 250 miles per year in trains and that rose to over 350 after 15 years. In summary, the overall distance travelled by an English citizen went up from 4740 to 6475 miles in 15 years and the car was the primary means of transportation for them.
The table data outlines transportation preference by British commuters between 1985 and 2000. As is obvious, cars were the most common means of travelling in the two mentioned years in the UK.

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, British did not
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taxi quite
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back in 1985
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13 miles
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was
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by every citizen which made the taxi the least common mode of transportation this
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year
.
However
, this number increased to
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42 miles
per person in 2000.
On the other hand
, bicycles were one of the least
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used
vehicles in 2000 covering
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only
41 passenger miles. It is
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clear
that cars were
still
on top of preference among commuters, increasing from
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3199 miles
in 1985 to
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4806 miles
in 2000. Walking habits remained almost the same by British while the
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use
of local bus declined. Each passenger travelled around
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250 miles
per
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year
in trains and that rose to over 350 after 15 years.

In summary, the
overall
distance travelled by an English citizen went up from 4740 to
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6475 miles
in 15 years and the car was the primary means of transportation for them.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 3

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185 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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