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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. v.2

The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. v. 2
The vertical bar chart depicts the spending patterns of Belgians, Spaniards, Austrians and Brits on six commodities in 2012. Overall, Brits spent higher amount for purchasing these goods while books, toys and cameras cost these nations higher than gaming consoles, outdoor gaming accessories and cosmetics did. As the data suggests, British spend just over 155 thousand pound sterling on console games in 2012 while other three nations spent between 145 to 150 thousand each. To buy outdoor sports equipment, English disbursed roughly 156 thousand, a close tie with that of Spaniards' spending. Austrians spent the lowest to have such accessories in this year. Moving further, people in Belgium and Austria purchased around 145 thousand pound's of cosmetics while this amount in Spain and Britain was roughly 10 and 15 thousand higher. It is worth noticing that Brits spent the highest amount to own these items in 2012 and their greater ratio of expense accounted for purchasing toys and cameras. Books cost more than 160 thousand to English while it was lowest for Belgians, somewhat 15 thousand less. These nations interest in owning toys and cameras showed a similar pattern and Austrians preferred spending for cameras more than they did for toys. British spend between 167 to 170 thousand for each of these two products and Austrian spent the least, approximately 145 thousand pound sterling.
The vertical bar chart depicts the spending patterns of Belgians, Spaniards, Austrians and Brits on six commodities in 2012.
Overall
, Brits
spent
higher amount for purchasing these
goods
while books,
toys
and
cameras
cost these nations higher than gaming consoles, outdoor gaming accessories and cosmetics did.

As the data suggests, British spend
just
over 155 thousand pound sterling on console games in 2012 while other three nations
spent
between 145 to 150
thousand each. To
buy
outdoor sports equipment, English disbursed roughly 156 thousand, a close tie with that of Spaniards' spending. Austrians
spent
the lowest to have such accessories in this year.

Moving
further
,
people
in Belgium and Austria
purchased
around 145 thousand
pound's
of cosmetics while this amount in Spain and Britain was roughly 10 and 15 thousand higher. It is worth noticing that Brits
spent
the highest amount to
own
these items in 2012 and their greater ratio of expense accounted for purchasing
toys
and
cameras
. Books cost more than 160 thousand to English while it was lowest for Belgians, somewhat 15 thousand less.

These nations interest in owning
toys
and
cameras
showed
a similar pattern and Austrians preferred spending for
cameras
more than they did for
toys
. British spend
between 167 to 170
thousand for each of these two products and Austrian
spent
the least, approximately 145 thousand pound sterling.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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