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The proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, 2000 and 2010. v.2

The proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, 2000 and 2010. v. 2
The number of the UK students who master other languages except english between 2000 and 2010 is depicted in the charts, and measured in percent. It can be clearly observed that there were some significant changes in the six different figures from 2000 to 2010. At first glance, the percentage of the UK pupils who could speak spanish only, another language, and two other languages rose gradually by 5% over a period of ten years. Moreover, spanish became the most skilled language by students in England both in 2000 and 2010. On the other hand, during a ten-years period many scholars were interested to do a conversation using new foreign languages that they learned, so english users were less at around 10% in 2010. By contrast, french language experienced a steady went down, accounted for 15% in 2000, and 10% in 2010, while german language just maintained the same level. To conclude, pupils in the UK tend to master many languages to communicate, as a consequence, they spoke less in english in 2010.
The number of the UK students who master other
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languages
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english
between 2000 and 2010
is depicted
in the charts, and measured in percent. It can be
clearly
observed that there were
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significant
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changes
in the six
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figures from 2000 to 2010.

At
first
glance, the percentage of the UK pupils who could speak
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spanish
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, another
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, and two other
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languages
rose
gradually
by 5% over a period of ten years.
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,
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spanish
became the most skilled
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language
by students in England both in 2000 and 2010.

On the other hand
, during a ten-years period
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scholars
were interested
to do a conversation using new foreign
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languages
that they learned,
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english
users were less at around 10% in 2010. By contrast,
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french
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experienced a steady went down, accounted for 15% in 2000, and 10% in 2010, while
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german
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maintained the same level.

To conclude
, pupils in the UK tend to master
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languages
to communicate, as a consequence, they spoke less in
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english
in 2010.
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IELTS academic The proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, 2000 and 2010. v. 2

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6.0
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