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The chart below gives information about social networking sites people used in Canada between 2014 and 2015. v.1

The chart below gives information about social networking sites people used in Canada between 2014 and 2015. v. 1
The following chart provides information on the numerous social networking sites people benefit from in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Overall, it has been noticed that people tend to use one site only thus having the highest percentage. However, only a few people use five sites and therefore it is shown that it has the lowest rate. To begin with, how the usage of one site is at the peak grasps the attention; in addition, the variations between the consumption of one site and the others are enormous. Moreover, in 2015 the utilization of one site remains the highest but it has decreased from slightly more than three-tenths to approximately higher than a quarter. On the other hand, the utilization of five sites has had the minimal percentages in 2014 and 2015. Furthermore, there is a drastic gap between the usage of five sites and the rest. Nonetheless, a small improvement has been spotted; the rates went from one percent higher than one-hundredth to one percent subtracted from one-twentieth.
The following chart provides information on the numerous social networking
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benefit from in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

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with, how the usage of one
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is at the peak grasps the attention;
in addition
, the variations between the consumption of one
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site
and the others are enormous.
Moreover
, in 2015 the utilization of one
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site
remains the highest
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but
it has decreased from
slightly
more than three-tenths to approximately higher than a quarter.

On the other hand
, the utilization of five
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sites
has had the minimal percentages in 2014 and 2015.
Furthermore
, there is a drastic gap between the usage of five
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sites
and the rest. Nonetheless, a
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small
improvement has
been spotted
; the rates went from one percent higher than one-hundredth to one percent subtracted from one-twentieth.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information about social networking sites people used in Canada between 2014 and 2015. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
169 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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