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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The frequency of heart attacks in the US. MenWomenThousands29-4445-6 v.1

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA.
The chart shows how age and gender influence the frequency of heart attacks in the US. Less than 6% of all heart attacks occur in the 29-44 age group. The number of women who suffer heart attacks in this group is negligible – only 3000 per year, compared to 123, 000 men. However the proportion of men and women with heart attacks rises dramatically between 45 and 64, with over half a million per year. Over 420, 000 men a year in this age group have heart attacks. The incidence amongst women increases – women have one heart attack for every three men in this age group. Over the age of 65, the number of men suffering heart attacks only increases slightly. However there is a huge increase in the number of women with heart attacks – they comprise over 40% of all victims. In conclusion, men are more likely to be the victims of heart attacks at all ages, but women are increasingly likely over the age of 65.
The chart
shows
how
age
and gender influence the frequency of
heart
attacks
in the US.

Less than 6% of all
heart
attacks
occur in the 29-44
age
group
. The number of
women
who suffer
heart
attacks
in this
group
is negligible
only
3000 per year, compared to 123, 000
men
.

However
the proportion of
men
and
women
with
heart
attacks
rises
dramatically
between 45 and 64, with
over
half a million per year.
Over
420, 000
men
a year in this
age
group
have
heart
attacks
. The incidence amongst
women
increases
women
have one
heart
attack
for every three
men
in this
age
group
.
Over
the
age
of 65, the number of
men
suffering
heart
attacks
only
increases
slightly
.
However
there is a huge increase in the number of
women
with
heart
attacks
they comprise
over
40% of all victims.

In conclusion
,
men
are more likely to be the victims of
heart
attacks
at all
ages
,
but
women
are
increasingly
likely
over
the
age
of 65.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

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