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The charts below show the proportion of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison v.2

The charts below show the proportion of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The given pie charts depict the percentage of British pupils at one university who apart from English dominated to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010. Overall, the proportion of British students who knew two or more language increase in 2010 compared with 2000. In addition for both years, the percentage of students who were able to speak Spanish were more than others. In 2000, one fifth of student did not know any language except English, this proportion decreased in 2010, and just 10% of students were one-lingual. The proportion of student who spoke German, in addition to English, was the same for both years (10%). In addition, bilingual students who could speak Spanish, increased from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010. The percentage of pupils at university, who had ability of speaking another language and French only were identical in 2000, but, in 2010, proportion of another language experienced a 5% increase to 20% and French only percentage decrease from 15% to 10%. Moreover, the proportion of trilingual student also increased by 5%.
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of British pupils at one university
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apart from English dominated to speak other
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languages
in 2000 and 2010.

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, the
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of British
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students
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who
knew two or more
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language
increase in 2010 compared with 2000. In
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addition
for both years, the
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percentage
of
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students
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who
were able to speak Spanish were more than others.

In 2000, one fifth of
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student
did not know any
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language
except English, this
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proportion
decreased in 2010, and
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just
10% of
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students
were one-lingual. The
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proportion
of
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student
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who
spoke German,
in addition
to English, was the same for both years (10%).
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, bilingual
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students
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who
could speak Spanish, increased from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010.

The
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percentage
of pupils at university,
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who
had ability of speaking another
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language
and French
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were identical in 2000,
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, in 2010,
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proportion
of another
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language
experienced a 5% increase to 20% and French
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only
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percentage
decrease from 15% to 10%.
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, the
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proportion
of trilingual
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student
also
increased by 5%.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the proportion of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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