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The chart shows the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 & 2010. v.2

The chart shows the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 & 2010. v. 2
The two pie charts show English students' proportion at one university, who can speak different languages apart from their native language, during 2000 and 2010. Overall, in both years, the most significant languages were Spanish and another language, which together accounted for over half the proportion of language, while german language and other kinds of language generated the least proportion of speaking language in England. In all type of language were spoken by the university students, was only minimal range over the 10 years. According to the pie charts, 20% of students spoke only the native language in 2000, and this showed a fell off about 10% in 2005. Likewise, in 2000, french spoke 10% of students, which dropped marginally to 10% a decade later. Furthermore, the proportion of german language remained the same over the 10 years. Moreover, the remaining proportion of languages, there was about 5% growth in the language of Spain, another language, and to other languages to 35%, 20%, and 15%, respectively.
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Knowledge of languages is the doorway to wisdom.
Roger Bacon

IELTS academic The chart shows the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 & 2010. v. 2

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