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The plans show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.4

The plans show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
The plans demonstrate the layout of a university sports centre before and after renovation. Overall, some expansions would be done to add up new areas for indoor uses. While some parts of inner layouts would keep unchanged, several places would be removed by new functional facilities in the future. Firstly, outdoor courts set on two sides would be replaced by a leisure pool and a new sports hall, while the 25m-pool in the centre and it surrounding facilities would remain the same except for the gym. The gym would be extended to connect with newly created dance studios, along with which there would be a changing room on the right corner. Next to the changing room, a smaller cafe would be also built there. On the left corner, there would be another changing room erected there, where a little sports shop would be made nearby. The space before entering the reception would be enlarged around threefold the one before. Finally, more alleys would be made to get through different areas inside the sports centre.
The plans demonstrate the layout of a university
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sports
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centre
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before
and after renovation.

Overall
,
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some
expansions would
be done
to
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add
up new areas for indoor
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uses
. While
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some
parts of inner layouts would
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keep
unchanged, several places would
be removed
by new functional facilities in the future.

Firstly
, outdoor courts set on two sides would
be replaced
by a leisure pool and a new
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sports
hall, while the
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25m
-pool in the
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centre
and
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it surrounding
facilities would remain the same
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except for
the gym. The gym would
be extended
to connect with
newly
created dance studios, along with which there would be a changing room on the right corner.
Next
to the changing room, a smaller
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cafe
would be
also
built there.

On the
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left
corner, there would be another changing room erected there, where a
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little
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sports
shop would
be made
nearby. The space
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before
entering the reception would
be enlarged
around threefold the one
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before
.
Finally
, more alleys would
be made
to
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get
through
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different
areas inside the
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sports
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centre
.
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IELTS academic The plans show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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4 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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