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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
The 2 plans indicate organisation of a sports facility of a university now and after refurbishment. The refurbishment work will increase building significantly in size as seen from second plan. Thereby its size will increase in future approximately 3 times than now it is. Obviously, the refurbishment work will demand a range of equipment and work force due to its size. First significant change is that outdoor courts will be leisure pool which will be contained in sports center. Furthermore, length of gym will be extended about twice and east outdoor courts will become sports hall which also be obtained in sports center which will be built. New sports center will open changing room, sports shop and cafe which will be situated right and east side of entrance. On the north east side of sport center, there will be 2 dance studio identical in their size. Finally, there will be 3 sections which will keep its present location and size after redevelopment of sports center (changing room of pool, 25 m pool and its seating)
The 2 plans indicate
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
of a
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sports
facility of a university
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and after refurbishment.

The refurbishment work will increase building
significantly
in size as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
from second plan. Thereby its size will increase in future approximately 3
Use "(times)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
times
than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
it is.
Obviously
, the refurbishment work will demand a range of equipment and work force due to its size.

First
significant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is that outdoor courts will be leisure pool which will
be contained
in
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sports
center.
Furthermore
, length of gym will
be extended
about twice and east outdoor courts will become
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
hall which
also
be obtained
in
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sports
center which will
be built
. New
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sports
center will open changing room,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
shop and
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
which will
be situated
right and east side of entrance. On the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
north east
side of
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sport
center, there will be 2 dance
Possible agreement error. The noun 'studio' seems to be countable, so consider using: "studios".
studio
identical in their size.

Finally
, there will be 3 sections which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
its present location and size after redevelopment of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center (changing room of pool, 25 m pool and its seating)
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS academic The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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