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The line graph shows the percentage of people of different age groups and how they rate a set of factors in terms of importance when buying a new home Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where releva v.2

The line graph shows the percentage of people of different age groups and how they rate a set of factors in terms of importance when buying a new home
The given linear representation shows the proportion of the people rating based on certain aspects like School, Parks and many more during purchasing a new home. Here, The graph describes data by different age group. As clearly seen from the graph, people whose age is between 25 to 34 years give less preference to park and public transport about below half of the 25 percent. Moving further, those tendencies will be increased when line reach at age group between 55 to 64 years. Moreover, considering the education; people whose age between 25 to 34, those give more priority to school and the trajectory of it would be sharply declined from age group 35 to 44. Furthermore, Shopping facilities are not essential for intial group and rating of it almost 12 percentage, however after the age group of 35 to 44 shopping trend substantially increased and culminated to almost 30 percent. Moving to the crime rate, it is a subtle variance in rating for all age group between the 75 to 100 percent. Overall, First age group more concern about school, whereas other groups consider other facilities like transport, parks and shopping. Crime rate is a significant concern for all groups but, first group is much care about it with a lower percentage.
The
given
linear representation
shows
the proportion of the
people
rating based on certain aspects like School, Parks and
many
more during purchasing a new home. Here, The graph
describes
data by
different
age
group.

As
clearly
seen
from the graph,
people
whose
age
is
between 25 to 34
years give less preference to park and public transport about below half of the 25 percent. Moving
further
, those tendencies will
be increased
when line reach at
age
group
between 55 to 64
years.
Moreover
, considering the education;
people
whose
age
between 25 to 34
, those give more priority to school and the trajectory of it would be
sharply
declined from
age
group
35 to 44.

Furthermore
, Shopping facilities are not essential for
intial
group
and rating of it almost 12 percentage,
however
after the
age
group
of 35 to 44 shopping
trend
substantially
increased and culminated to almost 30 percent. Moving to the crime rate, it is a subtle variance in rating for all
age
group
between the 75 to 100 percent.

Overall
,
First
age
group
more concern about school, whereas other
groups
consider other facilities like transport, parks and shopping. Crime rate is a significant concern for all
groups
but
,
first
group
is much care about it with a lower percentage.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph shows the percentage of people of different age groups and how they rate a set of factors in terms of importance when buying a new home

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4 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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