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The diagram below shows the number of landline ownership telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period. v.2

The diagram below shows the number of landline ownership telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period. v. 2
Depicted the chart is the information about how many people (per 1000) owned landline telephone in nine different countries over a half decade, since 2000. Overall, it can be seen that the general trend was for the ownership of landline telephone in all countries relatively to decrease during the period. Meanwhile, the figure in Singapore was the highest throughout the time scale. In 2000, there were the two highest figures for landline telephone owners in Singapore and Brunei, standing at just over 450 –the maximum recorded- and just under 250 severally. This was followed by Philiphines and Thailand, which had a similar level, with just under 100. Meanwhile, the number of people owning landline telephone in Indonesia, Vietnam, Cambodia, Lao PDR, and Myanmar was under 50. After 2000, the level of people having landline telephone in Singapore, Philipines, Myanmar, and Lao PDR experienced a slight decrease, dropping to around 450, 50, and 0 consecutively at the end of period. Only after the figure in Brunei increased to 250 (2002), the level then to drop to around 230 (2004), while Thailand and Indonesia experienced an enormous fall to 0 by 2004. By contrast, there was a gradual decline in Cambodia and Vietnam, rising to 50 and just above 50 each.
Depicted the chart is the information about how
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in nine
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countries over a half decade, since 2000.

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that the general trend was for the ownership of landline
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telephone
in all countries
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to decrease during the period. Meanwhile, the figure in Singapore was the highest throughout the time scale.

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telephone
owners in Singapore and Brunei, standing at
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over 450 –the maximum recorded- and
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under 250
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and Thailand, which had a similar level, with
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under 100. Meanwhile, the number of
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owning landline
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telephone
in Indonesia, Vietnam, Cambodia, Lao
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, and Myanmar was under 50.

After 2000, the level of
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Philipines
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experienced a slight decrease, dropping to around 450, 50, and 0
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after the figure in Brunei increased to 250 (2002), the level then to drop to around 230 (2004), while Thailand and Indonesia experienced an enormous fall to 0 by 2004. By contrast, there was a gradual decline in Cambodia and Vietnam, rising to 50 and
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the number of landline ownership telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period. v. 2

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209 words
6.0
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