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The plan below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.4

The plan below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
A couple of maps offer how the layout of a sport centre in university change in the future after replicating. Overall, the most significant change will be the presence of more new places leading to a sport layout. By contrast, two outdoor courts will not work in the future being demolished. Looking at the map for more details, while do 3 areas called a 25m pool, a seating and a changing room maintain, there has more new wonderfully places. To the East of the 25m pool, next to the seating, a hall for sport activities will be developed. In addition, there will have 2 studios for students desiring to dance. Furthermore, a future gym room will be twice as large as the old one. Especially, what makes a future centre different from old one is both cafe and sports shop respectively in the right and left turn when you immediately enter the centre. Apart from maintaining an old changing room, the centre will have 2 more same places for students. Finally, a new pool will be opened in leisure time that is bigger than another. It will be took place in the left side to the West of the 25m pool.
A couple of maps
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how the layout of a
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sport
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centre
in university
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change
in the
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future
after replicating.

Overall
, the most significant
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change
will be the presence of more new
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places
leading to a
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sport
layout. By contrast, two outdoor courts will not work in the
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future
being demolished
.

Looking at the map for more
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details
, while do 3 areas called a
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "25 m"
25m
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pool
, a seating and a changing room maintain, there has more new
wonderfully
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places
. To the East of the
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25m
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pool
,
next
to the seating, a hall for
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sport
activities will
be developed
.
In addition
, there will have 2 studios for students desiring to dance.
Furthermore
, a
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future
gym room will be twice as large as the
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old
one.

Especially
, what
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makes
a
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future
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centre
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different
from
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old
one is both
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cafe
and
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sports
shop
respectively
in the right and
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left
turn when you immediately enter the
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centre
. Apart from maintaining an
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old
changing room, the
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centre
will have 2 more same
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places
for students.
Finally
, a new
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pool
will
be opened
in leisure time
that is
bigger than another. It will be
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took
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place
in the
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left
side to the West of the
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25m
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pool
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The plan below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
201 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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