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The charls below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much
The pie charts below illustrate three types of nutreans devided in to average percentages that have in each meal in USA, which harms your health if taken too much. Overall, according to the charts, people use to have sodium and saturated fats rich dinner in USA while half of the nutrian percentage in lunch and one third of them in Breakfast. Mostly the highest consumption in Sodium and fats are 43% and 37%, which is in dinner, although the most of the added sugars are in snaks which is 42 percent. Meanwhile, the breakfast seems balanced of all three nutreans and it is mostly similar to each other in percentage. Furthermore, the lowest percentage of sodium reported in snaks, comparing to the dinner that is 14%. in summary, it’s clear that according to the charts, breakfast is the healthiest meal in the day consuming less percentage of all three nutriens, but dinner and snaks are the unhealthiest.
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, which harms your health if taken too much.

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in lunch and one third of them in Breakfast.

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the highest consumption in Sodium and fats are 43% and 37%, which is in
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dinner
, although the most of the
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which is 42 percent. Meanwhile, the breakfast seems balanced of all three
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nutreans
and it is
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.
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, the lowest
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of sodium reported in
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snaks
, comparing to the
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dinner
that is
14%.
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that according to the charts, breakfast is the healthiest meal in the day consuming less
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percentage
of all three
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nutriens
,
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and
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are the unhealthiest.
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IELTS academic The charls below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

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