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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v.4

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 4
The given map illustrates the current structure for university of sports and the future plan for university’ sports after refurbishment. In general, it can be seen, the university has now outdoor courts, but after innovation, the proposed structure does not have this facility. However, the cafe and spots shop is added to new structure of university of sports. To begin with the present hierarchy of university, it can be observed that, the structure consists of two outdoor courts in the east and west sides respectively. While the Gym is located in the north of university. Moreover, the seating is situated in the east of university near pool which its square 25 meters. Finally, the reception is located in front of pool in the south side. Turning to new structure of university, it can be witnessed that, the leisure pool is added to east of structure which is no this facility in old structure. In addition, in new structure has 3 position for changing room which was one position in the old one (the east side near pool). For people who have like dancing, the new structure has two dance studios which is not exist in the old structure.
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map illustrates the
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current
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structure
for
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university
of sports and the future plan for
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university’
sports after refurbishment.

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seen
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university
has
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now
outdoor courts,
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but
after innovation, the proposed
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structure
does not have this facility.
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cafe
and spots shop is
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added
to
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new
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structure
of
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university
of sports.

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begin
with the present hierarchy of
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university
, it can
be observed
that, the
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structure
consists of two outdoor courts in the east and west sides
respectively
.
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is located
in the north of
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university
.
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, the seating
is situated
in the east of
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university
near
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pool
which its square 25 meters.
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, the reception
is located
in front of
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pool
in the south side.

Turning to
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new
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structure
of
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university
, it can
be witnessed
that, the leisure
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pool
is
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added
to east of
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structure
which is
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no
this facility in
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old
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structure
.
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, in
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new
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structure
has 3 position for changing room which was one position in the
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old
one (the east side near
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pool)
. For
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people
who have like dancing, the
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new
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structure
has two dance studios which is not
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exist
in the
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old
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structure
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 4

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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