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The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in weathy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. v.2

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in weathy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. v. 2
The bar graph illustrates the average GDP for the three types of countries over a period of 30 years. In general terms, there was a fluctuation in the proportion of GDP per decade. It is clear from the bar chart show that in the 1960s, the figures for the wealthy countries accounted highest percentage about 5%. This figure is double that of the non-global countries and three times that of the globalisers countries. Nevertheless, this trend had changed significantly, the percentage of the globalisers' s annual GDP doubled nearly 2, 9% in the 1920s and there was also increase in the GDP of the non-global countries ( about 3, 2%) while the wealthy countries fell considerably ( around 2, 9%). In the 1980s and 1990s, the trend for the wealthy countries continued falling to a low point about 2% at the end of this period. However, the figures for the globalisers increased dramatically to reached a peak at approximately 5% in the 1990s. In constract, the GDP percentage of the non-globalisers fell significantly in 1980s and only rose slightly in 1990s to about 1, 4%.
The bar graph illustrates the average GDP for the three types of
countries
over a period of 30 years.

In general
terms, there was a fluctuation in the proportion of GDP per decade.

It is
clear
from the bar chart
show
that in the 1960s, the figures for the wealthy
countries
accounted
highest
percentage about 5%. This figure is double that of the non-global
countries
and three times that of the
globalisers
countries
.
Nevertheless
, this trend had
changed
significantly
, the percentage of the
globalisers&
#039; s annual GDP doubled
nearly
2, 9% in the 1920s and there was
also
increase in the GDP of the non-global
countries
(
about 3, 2%) while the wealthy
countries
fell
considerably
(
around 2, 9%).

In the 1980s and 1990s, the trend for the wealthy
countries
continued falling to a low point about 2% at the
end
of this period.
However
, the figures for the
globalisers
increased
dramatically
to reached
a peak at approximately 5% in the 1990s. In
constract
, the GDP percentage of the
non-globalisers
fell
significantly
in 1980s
and
only
rose
slightly
in 1990s
to about 1, 4%.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in weathy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. v. 2

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