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The chart illustrates housing preferences among people who lived in the British cities of London, Oxford and Cambridge in the year 2005. v.2

The chart illustrates housing preferences among people who lived in the British cities of London, Oxford and Cambridge in the year 2005. v. 2
The bar graph represents the preferred housing options by British citizens living in London, Oxford and Cambridge in 2005. Overall, terraced housed were least common while flats were preferred by the majority of British people. It is lucid from the bar graph that flats were the most popular accommodation in London with around 60% people living in them while 20% of people loved living in flats in Cambridge. On the other hand, a little under 20 percent people preferred terraced houses with a majority of them living in Oxford and approximately an equal population living in London and Cambridge. On the contrary, detached houses were least common in London and around 10% of city' s population lived in them. People of Cambridge who lived in detached homes outnumbered people of other two cities living in similar houses. It is evident from the bar graph that an equal number of people from Oxford and Cambridge had semi-detached houses as their housing preference. On the other hand, it was less popular among people of London city with about 20% people residing in them in 2005.
The bar graph represents the preferred housing options by British citizens
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living
in London, Oxford and Cambridge in 2005.

Overall
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common while flats
were preferred
by the majority of British
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people
.

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people
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living
in them while 20% of
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people
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loved
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living
in flats in Cambridge.
On the other hand
, a
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little
under 20 percent
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people
preferred terraced
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houses
with a majority of them
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living
in Oxford and approximately an equal population
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living
in London and Cambridge.

On the contrary
, detached
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houses
were least common in London and around 10% of
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city&
#039; s population
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lived
in them.
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People
of Cambridge who
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lived
in detached homes outnumbered
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people
of other two cities
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living
in similar
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houses
. It is evident from the bar graph that an equal number of
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people
from Oxford and Cambridge had semi-detached
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houses
as their housing preference.
On the other hand
, it was less popular among
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people
of London city with about 20%
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people
residing in them in 2005.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart illustrates housing preferences among people who lived in the British cities of London, Oxford and Cambridge in the year 2005. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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