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The plan below shows the layout of a university's sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment. v.2

The plan below shows the layout of a university's sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 2
The first map illustrates the present layout of a university sports centre and the second map demonstrates the future plan of a university sports centre. Overall, after redevelopment sports centre will be entirely changed rather than present now while the infrastructure and facilities of sports place will be also developed. According to the present map, The outdoor court is situated west and east of the sports centre and the swimming pool was located center of the club which is 25m long. Furthermore, changing room, gym, seating area and reception have been around of the swimming area where were standed in front of the entrance door. However, Turn to the future plan, There will be newly added various amenities to the sports centre. The outdoor court of the east in the present plan is going to be a sports hall while another one was dislodged and It will have converted the leisure pool. There is a two dancing stadium is going to be reconstructed east of the building. In additionally, It had been afresh built sport shop and cafe for the refreshment in the two sides of the entrance door in the renewal plan also the gym area will be increased in a size. To recapitulate, The future plane has plenty of amenities for the sportspeople.
The
first
map illustrates the
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present
layout of a university
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sports
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centre
and the second map demonstrates the future
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plan
of a university
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sports
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centre
.
Overall
, after redevelopment
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sports
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centre
will be
entirely
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changed
rather
than
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present
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now
while the infrastructure and facilities of
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sports
place will be
also
developed.

According to the
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present
map, The outdoor court
is situated
west and east of the
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sports
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centre
and the swimming pool
was located
center of the club which is
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25m
long.
Furthermore
, changing room, gym, seating area and reception have been around of the swimming area where were
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standed
in front of the entrance door.

However
, Turn to the future
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plan
, There will be
newly
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added
various amenities to the
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sports
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centre
. The outdoor court of the east in the
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present
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plan
is going to be a
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sports
hall while another one
was dislodged
and It will have converted the leisure pool. There is a two dancing stadium is going to
be reconstructed
east of the building. In
additionally
, It had been afresh built
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sport
shop and
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cafe
for the refreshment in the two sides of the entrance door in the renewal
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plan
also
the gym area will
be increased
in a size.

To recapitulate, The future
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plane
has
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plenty
of amenities for the sportspeople.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS academic The plan below shows the layout of a university's sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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