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The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v.3

The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 3
The maps illustrate the changes in the renovation plan of a sports center in a university. Overall, it is clear that there are remarkable improvements in the construction of new facilities and the relocation of some features inside the sports center. First of all, the pool in the center will remain unchanged, together with the reception in front of it, the changing room as well as the seating area on the left and the right of the pool. The first noticeable development is the expansion of the gym in the north of the center. Then, the outdoor courts on the right will be demolished to make space for a sports hall and two dance studios. Meanwhile, outdoor courts which are located on the left also be destroyed to make way for a leisure pool for students. Additionally, two changing rooms will be built in the southwest and southeast corners of the center. Finally, the university' s sports center will also provide students with food, drink and sports equipment by the construction of a café and a sports shop on two opposite sides of the entrance.
The maps illustrate the
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changes
in the renovation plan of a
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sports
center in a university.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that there are remarkable improvements in the construction of new facilities and the relocation of
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some
features inside the
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sports
center.

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First of all
, the pool in the center will remain unchanged, together with the reception in front of it, the changing room
as well
as the seating area on the
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left
and the right of the pool.

The
first
noticeable development is the expansion of the gym in the north of the center. Then, the outdoor courts on the right will
be demolished
to
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make
space for a
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sports
hall and two dance studios. Meanwhile, outdoor courts which
are located
on the
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left
also
be
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destroyed
to
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make
way for a leisure pool for students.
Additionally
, two changing rooms will
be built
in the southwest and southeast corners of the center.
Finally
, the
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sports
center will
also
provide students with food, drink and
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sports
equipment by the construction of a café and a
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sports
shop on two opposite sides of the entrance.
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IELTS academic The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
185 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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