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The graph shows data for annual sales revenue or turnover for three outdoor clothing companies from 2004 and 2014. v.1

The graph shows data for annual sales revenue or turnover for three outdoor clothing companies from 2004 and 2014. v. 1
The graph given illustrates the information in term of earning three outdoor clothing companies, namely Bradly Wear Ski and Snow Wear and Hiking Kit which were sold over the course of 10 years from 2004 to 2014. Overall, the Hiking Kit company had an upward trend in clothing income whereas there was an opposite pattern in the other cor. In 2004, The revenue of Bradly Outdoor Wear topped out at 3 million while this figure for the Ski and Snow Wear company saw a lower rate by million. At this time, just only 1, 5 million of the Hiking Fit clothes' company reached the lowest point in the yearly turnover. During a decade, the revenue of selling clothes of clothing the Hiking Kit company showed a rocket until the year 2014 witnessed a peak at 3, 5 million. Meanwhile, the opposite was true for both the Bradly and Ski and Snow. It decreased considerably after fluctuating slightly, 2, 7 million with Bradly and 0, 8 million with Ski and Snow, respectively.
The graph
given
illustrates the information in term of earning three outdoor clothing
companies
,
namely
Bradly
Wear
Ski and
Snow
Wear
and Hiking Kit which
were sold
over the course of 10 years from 2004 to 2014.

Overall
, the Hiking Kit
company
had an upward trend in clothing income whereas there was an opposite pattern in the other cor.

In 2004, The revenue of Bradly Outdoor
Wear
topped out at 3
million
while this figure for the Ski and
Snow
Wear
company
saw
a lower rate by
million
. At this time,
just
only
1, 5
million
of the Hiking Fit
clothes&
#039;
company
reached the lowest point in the yearly turnover.

During a decade, the revenue of selling clothes of clothing the Hiking Kit
company
showed
a rocket until the year 2014 witnessed a peak at 3, 5
million
. Meanwhile, the opposite was true for both the Bradly and Ski and
Snow
. It decreased
considerably
after fluctuating
slightly
, 2, 7
million
with Bradly and 0, 8
million
with Ski and
Snow
,
respectively
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows data for annual sales revenue or turnover for three outdoor clothing companies from 2004 and 2014. v. 1

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171 words
6.5
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