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The diagram below shows how sugar is produced from sugar beets. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information in the diagram about sugar. v.1

The diagram below shows how sugar is produced from sugar beets. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information in the diagram about sugar. v. 1
The illustration demonstrates the method of sugar production and how sugar beets are used to extract sugar. Overall, the whole process contains nine steps, beginning with unloading the sugar beets from the truck to remove dirt and culminating in using the centrifuge to produce sugar. The first stage of the process starts with transferring sugar beets to the factory and unloading them from the truck. Then, these sugar beets are shaken to make sure all of the dirt and rocks are removed. Afterwards, a beet washer is used to wash the beets until they are completely clean. Afterwards, the sugar beets are cut up into small pieces, which are called cossettes. At the next step, the cossettes are put into a glass container with hot water at 70 degree Celsius, which helps extract the sugar juice. Following that, milk of lime is also added to the container in order to purify the sugar juice. To ensure that the sugar juice is purely cleaned, the mixture of sugar juice and milk of lime is filtered for one more time. After that, the sugar juice is heated repeatedly with fire, which evaporates the water. Finally, the centrifugal force coming from a centrifuge is used to crystallize the resulting sugar.
The illustration demonstrates the method of
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sugar
production and how
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sugar
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beets
are
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used
to extract
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sugar
.
Overall
, the whole process contains nine steps, beginning with unloading the
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sugar
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beets
from the truck to remove dirt and culminating in using the centrifuge to produce sugar.

The
first
stage of the process
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starts
with transferring
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sugar
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beets
to the factory and unloading them from the truck. Then, these
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sugar
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beets
are shaken
to
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make
sure
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all of the
dirt and rocks
are removed
. Afterwards, a
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beet
washer is
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used
to wash the
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beets
until they are completely clean. Afterwards, the
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sugar
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beets
are
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cut
up into
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small
pieces, which
are called
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cossettes
.

At the
next
step, the
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cossettes
are put
into a glass container with hot water at 70 degree Celsius, which
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helps
extract the
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sugar
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juice
. Following that, milk of lime is
also
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added
to the container in order to purify the
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sugar
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juice
. To ensure that the
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sugar
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juice
is
purely
cleaned, the mixture of
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sugar
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juice
and milk of lime
is filtered
for one more time. After that, the
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sugar
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juice
is heated
repeatedly
with fire, which evaporates the water.
Finally
, the centrifugal force coming from a centrifuge is
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used
to crystallize the resulting
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sugar
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how sugar is produced from sugar beets. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information in the diagram about sugar. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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