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The charts below show the reason why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below show the reason why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
The pie chart above illustrates the proportion of numerous reasons why people choose cycling or driving to work. In general, it can be clearly seen from the chart that the most popular reason why people cycle to their office is on account of improving their health and lessening reducing the amount of pollution. Another interesting point is that most people decide to use their cars to work as this brings to them comfort. In terms of cycling, it is easy to see that the proportion of people who choose cycling in order to take care of their fitness is as same as the proportion of the ones who are aware of saving the environment, with a percentage of 30%. Besides, there are some other factors that people consider when cycling: no related-parking dilemmas, no exorbitant fees, and higher speed. These factors are comparatively lower in percentage than the two mentioned factors, with 15%, 13%, and 12% respectively. In contrast to this, there are also multiple reasons that determine people’s choices. Among them, the highest percentage of driving choices belongs to its satisfaction comfort nature with 40%, compared to 21% of the related-distance factor. While the number of people think that driving is faster than cycling and their need of bringing office supplies along to work has the same proportion, there is merely a little agreeing that driving is safer than cycling, which occupies 11% of all.
The pie chart above illustrates the
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proportion
of numerous reasons why
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people
choose
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cycling
or
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driving
to work.

In general
, it can be
clearly
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seen
from the chart that the most popular reason why
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people
cycle to their office is on account of improving their health and lessening reducing the amount of pollution. Another interesting point is that most
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people
decide to
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use
their cars to work as this brings to them comfort.

In terms of
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cycling
, it is easy to
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see
that the
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proportion
of
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people
who choose
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cycling
in order to take care of their fitness is as same as the
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proportion
of the ones who are aware of saving the environment, with a percentage of 30%.
Besides
, there are
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some
other
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factors
that
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people
consider when
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cycling
: no related-parking dilemmas, no exorbitant fees, and higher speed. These
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factors
are
comparatively
lower in percentage than the two mentioned
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factors
, with 15%, 13%, and 12%
respectively
.

In contrast
to this, there are
also
multiple reasons that determine
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people’s
choices. Among them, the highest percentage of
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driving
choices belongs to its satisfaction comfort nature with 40%, compared to 21% of the related-distance
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factor
. While the number of
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people
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think
that
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driving
is faster than
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cycling
and their need of bringing office supplies along to work has the same
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proportion
, there is
merely
a
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little
agreeing that
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driving
is safer than
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cycling
, which occupies 11% of all.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below show the reason why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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