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The chart below shows the numbers of travelers at 2 train stations at different times of the day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The chart below shows the numbers of travelers at 2 train stations at different times of the day.
The line graph reveals information on the number of train travelers delivered by two train stations in London-Euston station (LEs) and Barcelona-Sants station (BSs) from 6 a. m. in the morning to midnight on a typical day. From an overall perspective, one of the most outstanding futures is that there was a downward trend in all figures given for the number of travelers by LEs, whereas the corresponding figures of the number of travelers by BSs fluctuated throughout the whole day. In more detail, the figure of travelers by LEs recorded for the red line appeared to be by far the highest one, with nearly five thousand (4990 travelers) from 6 a. m. in the morning. In contrast, the figure for travelers in BSs observed for the blue line, with only almost one thousand (1049 travelers). In comparisons with two figures, the figure observed for two lines were considerable reduction from 6 a. m. to 12 p. m. in the lunch, with the corresponding figure of the red line graph reduced considerably, to roughly two thousand ( 2267 travelers) and the blue graph line decreased to approximately four hundred (441 travelers). Surprisingly, the two figures were a significant growth together, to almost three thousand (3260 travelers) from 12 p. m. in lunch to 18 p. m. Then, the number of travelers by two stations were declined sharply, to well under two thousand (2000 travelers) from 21 p. m. in the evening to midnight.
The
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graph reveals information on the
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number
of train
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travelers
delivered by two train
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stations
in
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London-Euston
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station
(
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LEs
) and
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Barcelona-Sants
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station
(
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BSs
) from 6 a. m. in the morning to midnight on a typical day. From an
overall
perspective, one of the most outstanding futures is that there was a downward trend in all
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figures
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given
for the
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number
of
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travelers
by
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LEs
, whereas the corresponding
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figures
of the
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number
of
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travelers
by
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BSs
fluctuated throughout the whole day.

In more detail, the
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figure
of
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travelers
by
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LEs
recorded for the red
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line
appeared to be by far the highest one, with
nearly
five thousand (4990
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travelers)
from 6
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a. m. in the morning.
In contrast
, the
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figure
for
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travelers
in
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BSs
observed for the blue
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line
, with
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only
almost one thousand (1049 travelers).

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In
comparisons with two
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figures
, the
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figure
observed for two
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lines
were considerable reduction from 6 a. m. to 12 p. m. in the lunch, with the corresponding
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figure
of the red
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graph
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reduced
considerably
, to roughly two thousand
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(
2267
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travelers)
and the blue graph
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line
decreased to approximately four hundred (441
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travelers)
.
Surprisingly
, the two
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figures
were a significant growth together, to almost three thousand (3260
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travelers)
from 12 p. m. in lunch to 18 p. m. Then, the
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number
of
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travelers
by two
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stations
were declined
sharply
, to well under two thousand (2000
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travelers)
from 21 p. m. in the evening to midnight.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the numbers of travelers at 2 train stations at different times of the day.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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