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The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 British companies in the car retail industry for the 2000 financial year write a report for a university lecturer comparing the performance of acme sports car and Branson motors for the period given v.1

The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 British companies in the car retail industry for the 2000 financial year write a report for a university lecturer comparing the performance of acme sports car and Branson motors for the period given v. 1
The given line graph compares monthly profits of given three British companies namely acme sports, Curtis car and Branson motors in 3 quarters for 2000 financial year. As observed from the graph that acme sports car had highest profit approximately $75 and the graph rose significantly in end of 1st quarter and reached $80. But figure dramatically down in end of 2nd quarter. It was only profit $15. We can see from graph remained stable in 3rd quarter and financial year. Branson motors started there profit in $20 and that figure significantly ride in 1st quarter and doubled profit in end of 1st quarter. In the 2nd quarter, the graph drastically rise and reached almost $60. After that it had some zing-zag trend in 3rd quarter. It remained their level at $60 end of financial year. On the other hand, Curtis car mart had good profit $40 in starting an that level drastically rose by $40 profit in 2nd quarter. but it was excellent performance in 3rd and financial year. Curtis car mart topped in financial year. it was nearly $80 profit. To sum up, in car retail industry most people prefer to buy sports cars between April to June month. After that tax was apply on luxury goods. so people changed their mind and they buy Branson motors and Curtis car industries.
The
given
line
graph
compares monthly
profits
of
given
three British
companies
namely
acme sports, Curtis
car
and
Branson
motors in 3
quarters
for 2000
financial
year.

As observed from the
graph
that acme sports
car
had
highest
profit
approximately $75 and the
graph
rose
significantly
in
end
of 1st
quarter
and reached $80.
But
figure
dramatically
down in
end
of 2nd
quarter
. It was
only
profit
$15. We can
see
from
graph
remained stable in 3rd
quarter
and
financial
year.
Branson
motors
started
there
profit
in $20 and that figure
significantly
ride in 1st
quarter
and doubled
profit
in
end
of 1st
quarter
. In the 2nd
quarter
, the
graph
drastically
rise and reached almost $60.
After
that it had
some
zing-zag
trend in 3rd
quarter
. It remained their level at $60
end
of
financial
year.

On the other hand
, Curtis
car
mart had
good
profit
$40 in starting
an that
level
drastically
rose by $40
profit
in 2nd
quarter
.
but
it was excellent performance in 3rd and
financial
year. Curtis
car
mart topped in
financial
year.
it
was
nearly
$80 profit.

To sum up, in
car
retail industry most
people
prefer to
buy
sports
cars
between April to June month.
After
that tax was apply on luxury
goods
.
so
people
changed
their
mind and
they
buy
Branson
motors and Curtis
car
industries.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the monthly profits of 3 British companies in the car retail industry for the 2000 financial year write a report for a university lecturer comparing the performance of acme sports car and Branson motors for the period given v. 1

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