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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2014. v.1

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2014. v. 1
The first pie chart classifies the main reason for different nationalities to migrate to the UK while the second one shows the reasons for English to leave the country in 2014. Overall, study and job were two predominant reasons for people to migrate to and from the UK. As is stated, almost one-third of the people immigrated to the UK in 2014 for academic study and that comprised the highest percentages of immigrants in the UK. 28% foreigners came to work for a UK company while 14% were there to get a job. Interestingly, one out of ten came to join friends or family members. 7% of them stated no apparent reason for their migration and the remaining 10% came for reasons that are not listed in the diagram. On the other hand, the highest percentage of British migrated to other countries for their study and just over one-fourth were hired by foreign companies. It is worth noticing that the primary reasons for immigration and emigration to and from the UK have a similar pattern. 15% British moved to other countries to search for a job and 14% moved to accompany someone they knew. Remaining 17% left the UK for unspecified reasons.
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for English to
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, study and job were two predominant
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people
to migrate to and from the UK.

As
is stated
, almost one-third of the
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immigrated to the UK in 2014 for academic study and that comprised the highest percentages of immigrants in the UK. 28% foreigners came to work for a UK
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company
while 14% were there to
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, one out of ten came to
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join
friends or family members. 7% of them stated no apparent
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reason
for their migration and the remaining 10% came for
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reasons
that are not listed in the diagram.

On the other hand
, the highest percentage of British migrated to other countries for their study and
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just
over one-fourth
were hired
by foreign
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companies
. It is worth noticing that the primary
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reasons
for immigration and emigration to and from the UK have a similar pattern. 15% British
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moved
to other countries to search for a job and 14%
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moved
to accompany someone they knew. Remaining 17%
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left
the UK for unspecified
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reasons
.
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2014. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
202 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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