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The charts below show the workforce profile at the top management jobs by ethnicity and race in South Africa based on a 2015/16 report. v.1

The charts below show the workforce profile at the top management jobs by ethnicity and race in South Africa based on a 2015/16 report. v. 1
The pie chart compares the South African top management workforce scenario based on different races and ethnicities while the bar graph depicts the same ratio in the public and private sectors. The data is taken from a report published in 2015/16. It is evident that top management positions in South Africa are white dominant and whites are over-presented in private job sectors while the Africans occupy the majority of top positions in public sector jobs. The pie chart reveals that whites are noticeably over-presented in the higher job positions in South Africa as they accounted for over 68% of all top management jobs compared to only 4. 7% and 14. 3% Coloured and Africans in such positions. Indians represent just over 8. 5% of this workforce while foreigners work in 3. 5% of such top-level positions. The bar graph depicts that South African top public sector jobs, over 73%, are dominated by African workers while white over-presents the private sector jobs. Every three out of five top private-sector jobs are occupied by whites. Finally, Indians accounted for 8 and 6 percentage private and public job positions, higher than the ratio of Coloured and foreigners' job ratio in top management in South Africa.
The pie chart compares the South African
top
management
workforce scenario based on
different
races and ethnicities while the bar graph depicts the same ratio in the
public
and
private
sectors
. The data
is taken
from a report published in 2015/16. It is evident that
top
management
positions
in South Africa are
white
dominant and
whites
are over-presented in
private
job
sectors
while the Africans occupy the majority of
top
positions
in
public
sector
jobs.

The pie chart reveals that
whites
are
noticeably
over-presented in the higher
job
positions
in South Africa as they accounted for over 68% of all
top
management
jobs
compared to
only
4. 7% and 14. 3%
Coloured
and Africans in such
positions
. Indians represent
just
over 8. 5% of this workforce while foreigners work in 3. 5% of such top-level positions.

The bar graph depicts that South African
top
public
sector
jobs
, over 73%,
are dominated
by African workers while
white
over-presents the
private
sector
jobs
. Every three out of five
top
private-sector
jobs
are occupied
by
whites
.
Finally
, Indians accounted for 8 and 6 percentage
private
and
public
job
positions
, higher than the ratio of
Coloured
and foreigners'
job
ratio in
top
management
in South Africa.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the workforce profile at the top management jobs by ethnicity and race in South Africa based on a 2015/16 report. v. 1

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