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The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission in a university. v.2

The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission in a university. v. 2
The column graph shows a comparison data between the number of applicants and the number of accepted students in a university over a decade, commencing from 1993. Overall, the number of applicants to this university remarkably increased each year despite a stable acceptance rate by the university authority. According to the illustration, around 250 students applied for admission to that university and almost 200 of them were granted. Next year, applicants went up to approximately 800 but half of them were rejected. The number of admission seekers to this institute steadily surged and in 2000 more than 3 thousand pupils attempted for admission. However, at this time only 600 of them were granted admission which means 80% applications were rejected in this year. This university accepted around 500 to 700 students each year from 1996 to 2003 despite a hike in the number of candidates. In 2002 and 2003 the university received around 4000 to 4500 application while they approved around 650 students’ admission. To get admitted in this university a candidate had to compete with 5-7 other applicants in 2003.
The column graph
shows
a comparison data between the
number
of
applicants
and the
number
of
accepted
students
in a
university
over a decade, commencing from 1993.
Overall
, the
number
of
applicants
to this
university
remarkably
increased each
year
despite a stable acceptance rate by the
university
authority.

According to the illustration,
around
250
students
applied for
admission
to that
university
and almost 200 of them
were granted
.
Next
year
,
applicants
went up to approximately 800
but
half of them
were rejected
. The
number
of
admission
seekers to this institute
steadily
surged and in 2000 more than 3 thousand pupils attempted for
admission
.
However
, at this time
only
600 of them
were granted
admission
which means 80% applications
were rejected
in this
year
. This
university
accepted
around
500 to 700
students
each
year
from 1996 to 2003 despite a hike in the
number
of candidates. In 2002 and 2003 the
university
received
around
4000 to 4500 application while they approved
around
650
students’
admission
. To
get
admitted in this
university
a candidate had to compete with 5-7 other
applicants
in 2003.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the comparison between the number of applicants and the number of students who were granted admission in a university. v. 2

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181 words
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