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The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007 Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate Write at least 150 words v.2

The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007
The pie charts compare the number of housing ownership and renting in the UK for 1991 and 2007 in percentage terms. In 1991, home owner took the main proportion, which was approximately 60% or over half of all homes. Socially rented homes accounted for 22% or a quarter of all homes. The remaining homes were mostly private renting (10%) with a tiny fraction of social housing, which only took 6%. Sixteen years later, in 2007, there was an increase in the percentage of home owner, which has reached 70% or thee quarters of all. This was a rise of 10% compared with 1991. The increase of home ownership could be explained by the the decrease of social renting from 22% in 1991 to 18% in 2007. Privately rented homes remained unchanged. However, there were 5 more millions homes so the number of private renting must have risen despite of being unchanged in percentage. Social housing decreased three-fold compared with 1991, which had dropped from 6% to nearly 2%. To summarize, home owner is the largest sector while social housing is the least popular type of housing.
The pie charts compare the number of housing ownership and
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renting
in the UK for 1991 and 2007 in percentage terms.

In 1991,
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home owner
took the main proportion, which was approximately 60% or over half of all
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homes
.
Socially
rented
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homes
accounted for 22% or a quarter of all
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homes
. The remaining
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homes
were
mostly
private
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renting
(10%) with a tiny fraction of
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social
housing, which
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only
took 6%.

Sixteen years later, in 2007, there was an increase in the percentage of
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home owner
, which has reached 70% or thee quarters of all. This was a rise of 10% compared with 1991. The increase of home ownership could be
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explained
by
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the the
decrease of
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social
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renting
from 22% in 1991 to 18% in 2007.
Privately
rented
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homes
remained unchanged.
However
, there were 5 more millions
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homes
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so
the number of private
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renting
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must
have risen
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despite of
being unchanged
in percentage.
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Social
housing decreased three-fold compared with 1991, which had dropped from 6% to
nearly
2%.

To summarize
,
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home owner
is the largest sector while
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social
housing is the least popular type of housing.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007

Academic
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4 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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