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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
The pie charts illustrate the primary reasons that people came to and left the UK in 2007. At first glance it is clear that the main factor influencing this decision was employment. Having a definite job accounted for 30 per cent of immigration to the UK, and this figure was very similar for emigration, at 29%. A large number of people, 22%, also emigrated because they were looking for a job, though the proportion of people entering the UK for this purpose was noticeably lower at less than a fifth. Another major factor influencing a move to the UK was for formal study, with over a quarter of people immigrating for this reason. However, interestingly, only a small minority, 4%, left for this. The proportions of those moving to join a family member were quite similar for immigration and emigration, at 15% and 13% respectively. Although a significant number of people (32%) gave ‘other’ reasons or did not give a reason why they emigrated, this accounted for only 17% with regards to immigration.
The pie charts illustrate the primary
reasons
that
people
came to and
left
the UK in 2007. At
first
glance it is
clear
that the main factor influencing this decision was employment.

Having a
definite
job accounted for 30 per cent of immigration to the UK, and this figure was
very
similar for emigration, at 29%.
A large number of
people
, 22%,
also
emigrated
because
they were looking for a job, though the proportion of
people
entering the UK for this purpose was
noticeably
lower at less than a fifth.

Another major factor influencing a
move
to the UK was for formal study, with over a quarter of
people
immigrating for this
reason
.
However
,
interestingly
,
only
a
small
minority, 4%,
left
for this.

The proportions of those moving to
join
a family member were quite similar for immigration and emigration, at 15% and 13%
respectively
. Although a significant number of
people
(32%) gave ‘other’
reasons
or did not give a
reason
why they emigrated, this accounted for
only
17%
with regards to
immigration.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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