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the given table shows that children had taken part in different cultures activities in the last 12 months. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relevant. v.2

the given table shows that children had taken part in different cultures activities in the last 12 months.
The give table depict the information of participation of children in different curricular activities in different ages. The data is calibrated in percentage. The most striking feature to be observed is that majority of children and other age groups were interested in any performance. It can be vividly seen that from 16 to 24 ages, any performance led with highest 35 percent whereas visual arts and writing acitivies occupied second and third position with 30, 17 percent respectively. From 25 to 44 ages, more people participated in visual and any performance. The participation in Computer based activity were less in every age. Turning to rest of description between 45 to 74 ages, undertaking any crafts had largest 22 percent followed by cultural purchase and any performance activities with 22, 17 percent orderly. As far as comparison is concerned, the juvenile participation in writing was doubled compare to other age groups. Children depict less interest in culture purchase and any craft compare to other age groups.
The give table depict the information of participation of children in
different
curricular activities in
different
ages
. The data
is calibrated
in percentage.

The
most striking feature to
be observed
is that majority of children and other
age
groups
were interested
in any performance.

It can be
vividly
seen
that from 16 to 24
ages
, any performance led with highest 35
percent
whereas visual arts and writing
acitivies
occupied second and third position with 30, 17
percent
respectively
. From 25 to 44
ages
, more
people
participated in visual and any performance. The participation in Computer based activity were less in every age.

Turning to rest of description
between 45 to 74
ages
, undertaking any crafts had largest 22
percent
followed by cultural
purchase
and any performance activities with 22, 17
percent
orderly. As far as comparison
is concerned
, the juvenile participation in writing
was doubled
compare to other
age
groups. Children depict less interest in culture
purchase
and any craft compare to other
age
groups.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic the given table shows that children had taken part in different cultures activities in the last 12 months.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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