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The pie charts show the highest education level of women in Sri Lanka in 1965 and 1995. v.2

The pie charts show the highest education level of women in Sri Lanka in 1965 and 1995. v. 2
The pie charts compare the women education level in Sri Lanka across two different years with a gap of 30 years. Overall, Sri Lankan women's education level in 1995 was significantly better than that of three decades earlier. In 1965, only 15% Sri Lankan women completed secondary education and only 3% completed their graduation. No women, in this year achieved a post-graduation qualification. A great percentage of Sri Lankan women, 35% to be exact, did not go to school at all. In 1995, 80% Sri Lankan women had completed their secondary education which was a remarkable improvement compared to the scenario 30 years earlier. 55% females had achieved graduation degrees while 20% had completed post-graduation studies. In this year, all girls attended schools and completed their primary education, though 20% of them ended their schooling at this point. This is a stark contrast with the women education level in 1965 when more than one-third of them received no education at all and 65% ended with the elementary education only.
The pie charts compare the
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level in 1995 was
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In 1965,
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their graduation. No
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, in this
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achieved a post-graduation qualification. A great percentage of Sri Lankan
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, 35% to be exact, did not go to school at all.

In 1995, 80% Sri Lankan
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had
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their secondary
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which was a remarkable improvement compared to the scenario 30 years earlier. 55% females had achieved graduation degrees while 20% had
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completed
post-graduation studies. In this
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, all girls attended schools and
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their primary
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, though 20% of them ended their schooling at this point. This is a stark contrast with the
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women
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level in 1965 when more than one-third of them received no
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at all and 65% ended with the elementary
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the highest education level of women in Sri Lanka in 1965 and 1995. v. 2

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