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The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v.3

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v. 3
The provided pie charts present a comparison on the education level of females in Someland between the years 1945 and 1995. Overall, as is observed, more female got educated in Someland in 1995 than that of 1945. Firstly, women education scenario in Someland in 1945 was terrible as there was no postgraduate woman and only 1% women who completed their first degree in this year. It is of note that in 1945 the percentages of females who did not finish even 12th class degree comprised 95% of total women. 35% of these women never went to school at all. On the contrary, the women education in Someland after 50 years witnessed a noticeable improvement. In this year all women in Someland went to school and completed at least 9th grade. The percentage of women completed their first degree was half of the total woman. 20% women completed their post-graduation at that time which was a significant improvement in terms of the women education in 1945. In summary, women's schooling rates in Someland made a noticeable progress during a 50-year period from 1945 to 1995.
The provided pie charts present a comparison on the
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between the years 1945 and 1995.
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in 1995 than that of 1945.

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scenario in
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in 1945 was terrible as there was no postgraduate woman and
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who
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. It is of note that in 1945 the percentages of females who did not finish even 12th
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class
degree comprised 95% of total
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. 35% of these
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never went to school at all.

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, the
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in
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after 50 years witnessed a noticeable improvement. In this
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all
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in
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went to school and
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at least 9th grade. The percentage of
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their
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degree was half of the total woman. 20%
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their post-graduation at that time which was a significant improvement in terms of the
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in 1945.

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IELTS academic The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v. 3

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