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The chart below shows the main reasons for university education among people of different age groups, based on a survey conducted in 2008, and the percentages of students who got support from their employers in this year. v.1

The chart below shows the main reasons for university education among people of different age groups, based on a survey conducted in 2008, and the percentages of students who got support from their employers in this year. v. 1
The graphs illustrate two main reasons for people from different age groups to pursue the university education and the ratio of tertiary pupils who got backings for their study from their employers. The data was taken from a survey carried out in 2008. Overall, younger people mostly studied in university for career preparation while it was personal interest for the people over 49 years old. Besides, younger people got more support from their employers than the aged people did. The first column graph reveals that eight out of ten university students below 26 years old studied for a better career. A same percentage of students, 70% to be exact, from 26 to 29 had the same reason for tertiary education. Interestingly, only around 10% of these students brought up ‘interests in study’ as a reason for their academic involvement. Pupils from 30 to 39 years also thought about the career while taking university courses. Interestingly, 40-49 age group was equally divided for their reasons to study – career and interest. Finally, 70% aged people studied due to their interests rather than jobs. Based on the second graph, university students got help from their employers basically in two forms – time off and sharing of tuition fee. It is worth noticing that young students got more support from their offices than the aged employees. Over 60% younger students received help from offices while 30 to 40% students from 30 plus age groups had been able to manage support from their employers.
The graphs illustrate two main
reasons
for
people
from
different
age groups to pursue the
university
education and the ratio of tertiary pupils who
got
backings for their study from their
employers
. The data
was taken
from a survey carried out in 2008.
Overall
, younger
people
mostly
studied in
university
for
career
preparation while it was personal
interest
for the
people
over 49 years
old
.
Besides
, younger
people
got
more support from their
employers
than the aged
people
did.

The
first
column graph reveals that eight out of ten
university
students
below 26 years
old
studied for a better
career
. A same percentage of
students
, 70% to be exact, from 26 to 29 had the same
reason
for tertiary education.
Interestingly
,
only
around 10% of these
students
brought up
‘interests
in study’ as a
reason
for their academic involvement. Pupils from 30 to 39 years
also
thought
about the
career
while taking
university
courses.
Interestingly
, 40-49 age group was
equally
divided for their
reasons
to study
career
and
interest
.
Finally
, 70% aged
people
studied due to their
interests
rather
than jobs.

Based on the second graph,
university
students
got
help
from their
employers
basically
in two forms
time off and sharing of tuition fee. It is worth noticing that young
students
got
more support from their offices than the aged employees. Over 60% younger
students
received
help
from offices while 30 to 40%
students
from 30 plus age groups had been able to manage support from their
employers
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the main reasons for university education among people of different age groups, based on a survey conducted in 2008, and the percentages of students who got support from their employers in this year. v. 1

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