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The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v.2

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v. 2
The pie charts show how the women education scenario in Someland changed by comparing the highest level of female education in 1995 with that of five decades earlier. Overall, a notable progress in education was achieved by women in Someland. According to the diagrams, more than one-third women in Someland did not receive any formal education in 1945 while another one-third dropped out before they even completed their primary education. This is a dismaying figure for women in terms of their schooling in Someland in 1945. Moreover, almost a quarter female merely finished their sixth and ninth grades whereas only 4% made it to their 12th grades. Merely 1% of these women were awarded their first-degree certificates while none of them earned the post-graduation qualification. However, after fifty years, the progress was remarkable when one in every five women in Someland finished their post-graduation, half of them earned their first-degree and all women finished at least grade 9. No women in Someland in 1995 was deprived of their education and 20% of them finished school years to finish their 12 grades.
The pie charts
show
how the
women
education
scenario in
Someland
changed
by comparing the highest level of female
education
in 1995 with that of five decades earlier.
Overall
,
a notable progress
in
education
was achieved
by
women
in
Someland
.

According to the diagrams, more than one-third
women
in
Someland
did not receive any formal
education
in 1945 while another one-third dropped out
before
they even completed their primary
education
. This is a dismaying figure for
women
in terms of their schooling in
Someland
in 1945.
Moreover
, almost a quarter female
merely
finished
their sixth and ninth
grades
whereas
only
4% made it to their 12th
grades
.
Merely
1% of these
women
were awarded
their
first
-degree certificates while none of them earned the post-graduation qualification.

However
, after fifty years, the progress was remarkable when one in every five
women
in
Someland
finished
their post-graduation, half of them earned their
first
-degree and all
women
finished
at least
grade
9. No
women
in
Someland
in 1995
was deprived
of their
education
and 20% of them
finished
school years to finish their 12
grades
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v. 2

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